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My First Draft of the front Cover
Focus Group Response to the Draft Front Cover
I went back to my focus group to discuss what they all thought about my first draft of the front cover. Here is some things what they said:
"I really like it. It looks professional. modern and has all the key features of a real magazine on it. My favourite bit is the 'exclusive Mel Williams' bit because it frames the models head really well. However, just a small improvement you could make is changing 'Mel Williams' to white and 'The new Queen of POP?' to blue. This is because to me 'The new Queen of pop' stands out more and as a reader you are more interested in the actual artist.
"Overall I think you have done a really good job, if I was too see this is a magazine I would pick it up. I particularly like the picture of the model, it is really inviting to the reader and finding out about her would interest me. However, I would move the masterhead above the image because it is a new magazine which means you need to show off the name of your magazine in order for them to remember it, if they remember the name of the magazine they're more likely to buy it."
"The information and overall look of the magazine is really good. You have mixed up a lot of different magazine styles to make your own which I like. But, the black rectangles for underlining doesn't fit in for me and makes it look a bit undertidy. With saying this, it is designed really well and 100% suits your target audience.
After my meeting with my focus group, I took their feedback on board and made a few changes. there is my Draft Two front cover:
I have moved the masterhead so it now overlaps the image.
I have removed the black rectangles that underline dthe text at the side.
I have removed the gradient background because I didn't want to use too many colours.
I have changed 'Mel Williams' to white and 'the new queen of pop' to blue.
In the bottom strip I've added more information to what is inside the magazine, therefore it will interest the reader more.
Looking back on the rules of thirds, I could have made a few things neater. First of all, I feel the image needs to be slightly higher so that the eyes is nearer the top blue line so that her facial features fits in the middle sqaure. Also, they blue circles advertising the competition needed to be lower so that it could of fitted in the middle row right box. With saying this, the 'Z' runs perfectly throught the master head onto the image and then on to the black rectangles. Plus the red circles, hit the other peices of text in the faded orange circles making it much more strurctured and balanced.
My Draft One Contents Page
